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[link]I dare say I'd like to give Morgenstern Williams a hug, as well, for his plucky defense of our heroes aboard the White Queen! And by remote control, no less! My oh my.
But yes. Part two for you all. How'd the space combat go? Good? Good.
Wrote some epic combat in Drowned today, and remembered that OiS needed a conclusion to chapter 15, so here you go! Lookin' forward to the day when Drowned his behind me and OiS is my world again. I'm still experiencing a major case of End-is-Nigh-itis on Drowned.
Playing Mass Effect 1 (yes, 1! after I beat 2!) makes me want to go back to spaaaaace in writing land. Oh how troublesome.
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Like Denise, I liked the parentheta-blah-blah-blah too. It isn't done much in dialogue so it really stood out. It set Toric's rant off even better than commas or em dashes, IMO.
A boobie (see, now you can't say this fic doesn't have em): "Not really." He said, then shrugging lightly. You mean 'shrugged?' Or 'he said, shrugging lightly?' And I'm tag policing yo ass. Is punctuated wrong too.
Happy pounding on The Drowned. I need to dig back into that one soon too.
AND BOOOOOBIES! You and Denise want to see Toric and Darcy hump, I know you guys, but dude, I swear I can't write that stuff. It'll be like "And then they went into a room. Neil booked it as fast as he feet would carry him to the other side of the ship. He had what was left of his innocence to protect." LOL. wut.
And booo tag and word malfuctions! Call the police. D:
Yup, those two need to have some disco time. But I agree that it doesn't need to be described. Just won't fit the style of this story.
Typo alert: Did you mean "to" instead of "the"? Toric went to the captain's side, and Neil was quick the follow.
Also, should this have been "hull" and not "hill"? a thundering from the ship's hill signified a hit.
But even with a few goofs, this is a great chapter in my book. Er, in your book.
And yeah I did. Typo ftl... Same with hull / hill... orz.
MY BOOK! Sadly...I have no more to post. I can't channel Darcy and Toric while channeling the dark city.
Typos, like shit, happen.
I will try to be patient.