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I watch 20 minutes of the Science Channel and this madness comes to mind. Thank GOD because `Memnalar's contest is almost over and I haven't entered anything in forever or actually written anything in forever that's not a long thing, so here we are!

There's a lot of shout outs in this. The EXTREME MAIL DELIVERY of MSPA's Homestuck, for one. And Rose's mom's scarf. And the word Rose. >_> Yeah, okay, anywho... There's lots of plot points that sort of loop around, or negate each other. Or at lest they should.

So anywho, free crit this. Help me make it pretty before the contest ends. Tell me what you think. Tell me especially what you think the package was.

German corrections thanks to *Siobhan68 :heart:
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AthdaraSeleya Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

Perfect story, I really love it!

 

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LunaticStar Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
Thank you! 
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AthdaraSeleya Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

You're welcome! :)

 

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iStrife Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
This. Is so. Perfect. There's so much to it, and it's all so interesting. I feel like I could write so much about what I like, and what I feel a loss for words. So just know, this is one of the best things I've read on here in a long time. Thanks you for that.
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
Thank you! Glad you liked it. :)
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
I love this! Well written, thought provoking, and engaging. Cool concepts :) Usually I skim pieces this long but I read every word.
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
Reading on DA is hard, yeah, I know. Thanks for sticking it out and reading it tho!
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
It was definitely worth it! Thank you for sharing!
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KopaLeo Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"Keine bewejung!" is misspelled, should be "Keine bewegung!"

Also, as a theoretical-physicist-to-be, I have to point out that the event horizon is not where you are doomed to die. Simply put, the event horizon is a boundary in spacetime. If you are a fearless physics graduate student, sent into a supermassive black hole (there is one in the center of Milky Way ) by your wicked professor, then this is what is going to happen:
As you fly nearer and nearer to the event horizon, you sent out what you observe to your professor, who was safely sitting in a spaceship 10^9 km away.
At first the professor receives your messages just fine, nothing seems wrong.
Then he notices that your voice is dragged out, slowed down. That's because the gravity is giving the radio signal a very hard time going out, and this delays the signal.
As you cross the event horizon, you feel nothing strange, and sends out the signal, "Crossing the EH now, I'm fine!" But the signal is "stuck" on the event horizon, never able to move out an inch, ever.
Then you started to feel strange, and in mere seconds you would be "spaghettified" and die. But that was when you had reached deep INSIDE the event horizon.



Read this: [link]

Hope that this helps! Science is awesome!
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Yeah, I just copypasta'd what someone had sent me, I don't know German at all!

And it's fiction, I'm an amateur, and have no problem keeping the physics, wrong as they are, they way they are. If I were writing for realism, I would def research the issue more.
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