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haiku - abandoned plans by *LunaticStar:iconLunaticStar:



Abandoned plans; if I had left, if I hadn't left, would it have made a difference?  Would I be thinking the same thoughts in a different place?  They do say, after all, wherever you go, there you are.

on my umbrella
raindrops fall and cascade down
from the same, old clouds

傘の上
雨、降り下る
古い雲
©2008-2009 *LunaticStar
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Author's Comments

What kind of plans, then?

When I write poems, everything has meaning, not just the body of the poem. Its a habit I picked up from studying classical japanese lit. The title, preface, and poem are all part of the work. Prefaces, by the way, are very common in older poetry, mostly tanka though. haiku is so modern, bah.

Enjoy. :P

Edit: 日本語で書きました、がんばっただけど、よくできたかどうか分かりません。 簡単の言葉を使って、コレクトをお願いします~

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:iconkellydwilliamson:
:) You just sold a smile

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Only the Extreme Make an impression
:iconlunaticstar:
How much did I get for it? :ohnoes:

+ thanks :D

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If wishes were horses, we'd all be eating steak. - Jayne, Firefly.
:iconliterary--device:
:D

Rain always makes my day better... makes me not feel so bad about staying inside all day.

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Beauty’s ensign yet
Is crimson in thy lips and in thy cheeks,
And death’s pale flag is not advanced there.

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:iconlunaticstar:
I see I see. :nod:

I wish it would rain. =/ + maybe I should explain myself intead of having a bs comment. I just realized what the poem seems like at first glance from your comment. <.<

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If wishes were horses, we'd all be eating steak. - Jayne, Firefly.
:icondenlm:
Playing in the rain today I see.
:iconliterary--device:
:D I'm one of those that sees things at face value... soooo... ^^;

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Beauty’s ensign yet
Is crimson in thy lips and in thy cheeks,
And death’s pale flag is not advanced there.

~
:iconlunaticstar:
I added some stuff so it might make more sense now. I really didn't see it as what it obviously is at first. :x Hibye.

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If wishes were horses, we'd all be eating steak. - Jayne, Firefly.
:iconkira73:
I really love the double meaning of this haiku. Great job!

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~Pararoms and romanticas~
:iconlunaticstar:
tyty :heart:

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If wishes were horses, we'd all be eating steak. - Jayne, Firefly.
:icondenlm:
Too much water in your eyes; how could you?

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